2/18/2022 8:49:39 AM
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A question about the Villanelle form
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Hello!
There are two lines in the first stanza of the Villanelle that each get repeated 3 times later in the poem. In particular the first line of stanza 1 appears in stanzas 2, 4, and 6.
My question is this: because the line starts at the beginning of a stanza, I used "For" as the first word.
Later in the poem, it is supposed to be the last line of a stanza, and it would read better if I could use "But" as the first word instead.
Are you allowed to make any modification to the repeat line?
Oh, that I would have had a day. The Lord has called you to His side. For there were things that I would say.
(later, in stanza 4)
I’m torn, my thoughts in disarray; I know that you with Him abide, But there were things that I would say.
Is such a change allowed or disallowed by the form? edited by ktrails on 2/18/2022 edited by ktrails on 2/18/2022 edited by ktrails on 2/18/2022
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2/18/2022 10:33:04 AM
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