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10/27/2018 8:14:34 AM
Jay Yeats
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you think its okay
to sink your teeth into her
and pull out chunks
until she thinks
thats where her worth comes from,
the pieces
she loses
and when did she stop
being able to raise her voice
above a
wisper?
and why do you ask
where the strength of her spine went?
where the woman you loved went?
when you trained it out of her
you took it from her
you dont get to be mad about what you
lost
you lost nothing
you didnt take
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10/31/2018 6:26:14 AM
Lycia Harding
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I really like this. I love the indignance and the symmetrical way it flows smoothly from cause, to question, to accountability. The formatting lends to the cadence perfectly, as well. Very nice!
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