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3/19/2018 2:05:21 PM
Greta Climer Posts: 1
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They said lower was safer,but they were wrong We saved our energy, but at what cost? One requires heat to take a bath I’m now announcing that investment is priceless To submerge, to soak, to sink To be enveloped, held and warmed Almost medicinal, entirely necessary For revival, recharging and renewal Turn up your thermostat Learn from my mistake You deserve more than one hundred twenty degrees Move your dial, even just a little.
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4/16/2018 9:24:43 PM
JW Nugent Posts: 8
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Would make "but they were wrong," the second line for better emphasis.
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