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6/19/2017 10:13:30 AM
Marko Dolic Posts: 1
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I grade days by traces of grace I get To see the shapes of your face, maybe gaze my way
You feel like this world's a better place And I'm afraid, that i might settle for the chase On a road that knows no names, and holds no pain Im just a lone wolf waiting for your hand to be tamed
And who to blame, 'cause the prey don't taste the same way From that very same day that I said your name
And it's a d*mn shame that it's hard to find words That'll compliment your curves But courteous enough that they'd serve the right purpose 'cause u deserve a lot more than a sum of these verbs
I wanna give you the world, girl I'm certain You changed the definition of whats perfect And it breaks my heart to see u hurting
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6/19/2017 7:46:32 PM
Graphite Drug Posts: 81
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Not sure if you're trying to rhyme or rap? Formal poems spell out "y-o-u" not "u". They also, for the most part, avoid rhyming within lines and at the end. Try some basic skills: write short lines that rhyme at the end only. If you write assertively these skills work well with rap.
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