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9/6/2019 8:57:36 PM MS. CATHERINE Posts: 1	IN THE AIR WITHOUT A STARE THE ROYAL KING A PRECIOUS SCENE.
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9/7/2019 11:10:51 AM Jack Webster Posts: 255	Not clear what’s going on, but very lovely iambic dimeter. The brevity of the meter adds a lot of tension to the lines. Beginning the first line with a lame foot starts it off with a lot of force from the stressed syllable. Normally I don’t go for all caps because poetry is mainly meant to be heard, so the typography isn’t terribly relevant, but it really captures a sense of outrage that I’m not sure would be evident without it unless it was heard read aloud. All in all, I’d make it longer for the sake of clarity, but be careful to avoid a rant. Ideally a poem is something the reader enters and inhabits. edited by superlativedeleted on 9/7/2019
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