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4/29/2024 9:45:43 PM
Kirsten McC Posts: 1
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Hi all! I just wanted to say hi to everyone and I am so excited to have joined this forum to get feedback and read other people's work. I am fairly new to writing poetry and still figuring a lot of things out so please be gentle (as the title of this forum suggests)! Thanks in advance!
*warning: contains the F word*
7=1
It's first on the page, last in the mind
Anticipation kills the calm,
And then it comes, the beginning unwanted.
F*cking cyclical.
It's a little easier next, but we are still stuck fast
In this arbitrary world, time on a track made of dollar signs.
The middle is a place we can handle,
the comforting balance of a scale
then suddenly tipped in our favour,
one foot lifted from the quick sand breathes at last.
And we're there, the destination arrives,
the last in a vicious, uncaring sequence.
A night of possibilities, that seems endless,
opens and stretches like the limbs after a long car ride.
The moon rises and we are free.
One day to live, to do all, be all.
Perhaps this is why they say life is short.
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